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RyuGaia
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posted June 08, 2006 06:44 AM |
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Edited by RyuGaia at 07:00, 08 Jun 2006.
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The Heroes' Quest Virutal Series
I'm something of a writer, and for the past six months or so, I've been hard at work (pfft...) on a virtual series. It's likely that many of you have never heard of a VS, let alone know what one is, but it's basically like a television series in that episodes are released at more or less regular intervals, except in the form of scripts.
The Heroes' Quest chronicles the adventures of Ryu, Falco, and Kythe, the fabled 'heroes' of Syrith, as they quest to defeat Lord Seth, the ruler of a mighty and oppressive empire that is slowly but certainly conquering the world.
Yes, on the surface, it's extremely cliche, but, that's only the surface. Currently, 9 episodes have been released (at an average length of around 33 pages, although it's in script format, so bear in mind that it's not 33 pages of nonstop text), and the tenth episode will be released on friday.
I'm really hoping for reviews and such, because not many people on the forums that I usually frequent are very much into the fantasy genre.
The episodes are in .pdf format, and are available here: http://www.freewebs.com/worldofsyrith/scripts.htm
For the record, the first episode has recently been rereleased and is an update of the original, whereas the second and third episodes aren't quite up to the same standards (but will soon be revised) - however, it's at a pretty consistent standard of writing from the fourth episode onwards (although I will admit that the sixth needs a slight bit of brushing up, which I'm currently working on, and the character dialogue in the fourth is a bit stiff, but that's changed over time).
Here, I'm going to post an excerpt from the revised first episode, page 16/33:
Quote:
[Ryu runs back out of the dense plants, and draws his sword.]
RYU
We’re not safe here!
FALCO
(concerned)
What is it?
[Two soldiers step out of the bushes in front of them, two more behind them, and two more on either side. One of them speaks, and he is obviously their leader.]
SOLDIER #1
In the interest of the Empire and
the name of Lord Seth, both of you
are to be tried and sentenced for
threatening to join the resistance.
RYU
(quickly)
You have no jurisdiction in Syrith,
and no right to arrest us.
[The soldier draws his sword, and shakes his head.]
SOLDIER #1
You don’t get it… regardless of the
laws of the former governing body of
this country, the empire is unopposed
in this land, and will soon rule it,
as it does so many others already. It
doesn’t matter whether this is official
or not…
(he glares at Ryu)
Which means it doesn’t matter whether
you are killed or not.
[Ryu assumes a fighting stance.]
RYU
I suppose this means that I’ll have
to defend myself.
[Ryu steps forward. In split second, the following happens: Soldier #1 begins charging Ryu with sword drawn, Ryu stands still and watches.]
I find that this excerpt is more of a taste of the quality of the writing as opposed to the actual flow of the story, but I do hope you'll like it, and I'll post more of it later. In the actual episodes, though, there are no brackets like there are in the quote, because the formatting from the script doesn't carry over into the quote, and therefore I had to make it more readable.
Episode List/Guide:
Episode 101: The Heroes of Syrith
[Ryu and Falco meet and join forces in their trek to join the growing resistance against Lord Seth. The resistance prepares for a battle that will determine the balance of power on the Syrithian continent. ]
Episode 102: Kythe – Friend or Foe?
[A ninja with a dark and painful past is sent to kill Ryu and Falco for their actions against the Empire. Falco makes a discovery about who he is, and about the symbols on the backs of his and Ryu's hands - which are also on the back of their attacker's. ]
Episode 103: The Eye in the Window
[Ryu, Falco, and Kythe arrive in a quiet village, but are soon thrust into their first challenge as the heroes of Syrith when they learn of an ancient evil, and Ryu is threatened with certain death by a supernatural force. ]
Episode 104: Homebound
[Ryu is confonted with his past as he prepares to venture on a leg of his quest which will take him to his home. ]
Episode 105: City of Light
[The heroes arrive in Luna City, the capital of what remains of the free world. When it is discovered that they are the legendary Heroes of Syrith, they become involved in a bid to make the Council elect to mobilize the army - but soon face traitors and an all-out invasion of the city. ]
Episode 106: Faded Memories
[Finally, after many months, Ryu arrives in Pyrona Village - but he is ambushed and captured by Lord Seth himself. As Ryu faces death of the worst kind, Falco, Kythe, and Chris work as quickly as they can to find him... ...before he is destroyed by his own memories. ]
Episode 107: Siege on the Citadel, Part I
[As the resistance leaders collaborate to prepare for attacking Lord Seth's stronghold in the mountain range, an old friend of an uncertain fate returns to warn them of an impending siege on their citadel. (Part I of II.) ]
Episode 108: Siege on the Seas, Part II
[Ryu and Falco race against time to get to the resistance Citadel before the Imperial airship does, to warn them of them impending attack. Meanwhile, General Corin leads the resistance fleet into battle with the Imperial fleet for control of the Palace Gulf. (Part II of II.) ]
Episode 109: The Journey Back
[Seperated from the resistance after the fierce battles for southern Syrith, Ryu, Falco, and Kythe meet up again, along with Chris - whose distorted memories have returned from his self-induced amnesia. Their minds come under attack by a dark force, trapping Ryu and Kythe in Chris's memories. ]
Episode 110: The Archer and the Wizard
Episode 111: Crusade
Episode 112: Return to the Black Forest
Episode 113: Memento Mori
Episode 114: Thermopylae
Episode 115: Into the Labyrinth
Episode 116: The Fate of the World, Part I
Episode 117: The Fate of the World, Part II
Episode 118: Aftermath
As I said above, the first nine have been released.
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friendofgunnar
Honorable
Legendary Hero
able to speed up time
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posted June 08, 2006 08:03 PM |
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First of all, the "script" format you are using is somewhat difficult to read. I know that's standard but I really don't even really understand how the professionals do it. Maybe they've done it for so long their mind can just understand it intuitively. I would be much more inclined to read it if it was in prose though.
also this is just IMHO but it does sound a bit cliched,
It also kind of sounds like star wars too.
You might want to try your hand at Milena's short story contest.
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also I just looked over your post again and I didn't see any women anywhere, which automatically makes me think it's a snoozefest.
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RyuGaia
Tavern Dweller
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posted June 08, 2006 08:24 PM |
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Well, I can safely tell you that once you know a bit more about it, you'll realize that it doesn't share any more in common with Star Wars than the concept of an empire with no specific name. I said that it does sound cliche on the surface, but there's a lot of backstory to the world and the characters that I don't exactly want to reveal in the brief description of the series.
As for a lack of women, that's not exactly true. I don't have any women regulars, but that's because there wasn't exactly a part for one (if I could have included one, I would have). You see, the virtual series is based off of a role play two of my friends and I did in real life, and neither of them are girls. Hence, three heroes who are males. There is a female character who will play a strong role in the 18th episode, and there will also be a 'short' (which is essentially a short screenplay that's not quite an episode or a movie) centered around her.
Can't help you with script format. I find that it's pretty easy to read - did you check the actual documents, though? The quote is hard to read, but the actual documents are very different.
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