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King_Nikolai
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posted May 20, 2008 06:34 PM |
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The Turncoat
(Im all new to this so I simply wanna try out and see how it goes, if I do anything wrong dont be afraid of critisice me, I wanna learn  If Im right everybode makes a character and tells his story, right? The story is played in the Homm V alternate universe. Please someone tell me how to paste pictures into the thread, I have a map that I want to use here. )
Northern Steppes of Karith, 702 AC (After Cataclysm)
A sudden sting of pain is what awakens his mind. He can't see anything. But he isnt blind, he is sure of that. There is a stench. It smells like a graveyard, the stench of death tortures his senses.
He moves his hands. One of them is stuck, the other one grasping for his eyes, to uncover whatever hinders his sight.
He is buried.
He knows it. The stench is of old earth and rotting animal corpses. His one hand is somehow above ground.
After hours of work, he can finaly stand up in the free air. His sight is weakened, everything is blur and out of focus. His skin felt cool and itchy, his hair and nails far too long and untidy.
What had happened? He tries to gather his mind to the last memory.
Suddenly his sight gets better, and at the same time his eyes open fully, his mouth opens in a mad grin, his face looking that of a lunatic, a madman.
When looking at his hand, it has a dark blue color, but what makes him trul believing he is crazy, is how he can see though the pale skin, into his rotten flesh, where the blood long ago dissapeared. He screams. He screams until his lungs hurt. He screams until his voice becomes soar and start to fade out. But the grin is still there.
And while his screams fade out and he slowly fall to his knees, his eyes fall upon the letter right next to a shovel.
To be continued
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DagothGares
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posted May 20, 2008 08:47 PM |
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Alright!!! Someone new with high initiative... (I'm actually new too, but I don't much care)
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 20, 2008 08:48 PM |
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(Yeah, big ideas, little skillz to accomplish it ^^ thought it be nice for people with imagination to sit down and tell their little HoMM story...by the way, you know how to post my map in here? I really want too.  )
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 20, 2008 10:02 PM |
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(Gotta look like I'm talking to myself here, but i just gotta post this, and by the way, this is an excellent way to entertain myself ^^ now Im as you can read above, working on a map of a world of my imagination. I would like to know if anyone is interested in working on this, since I don't believe I can make it all myself and since it is fun to exchange ideas )
After hours lying on the ground, damning his own existence, he slowly walks towards the letter. With a trembling, rotten hand, he picks it up and starts reading. At least his curiosiry is still with him.
Dear experiment
If you can read this letter, then my work was succesfull. I am the necromancer who brougt you here. My names is not important. With your background, I would believe you are feeling quite bad. I will thereby encourage you of your current situation. As an undead you cannot feel pain, isn't that a relief to hear? Also you don't needto worry about women, as you did in your old days. I can guarantee that no woman ever will come close to you again. So in the long run I have hepled you, see? If you still feel a bit at unease I can gladly inform you that my apprentice Vradish is ready to welcome you at Nabimu-Heshe. Any possible side effects is his responsability. Have a nice day, my test subject.
After reading the letter, he became berserk, starting to smash the cemetery to pieces.
Days later there was reports of an unknown undead traversing the countryside for Nabimu-Heshe.
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DagothGares
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posted May 20, 2008 10:53 PM |
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Nice! I actually enjoy it... Dunno why...
Alright this is filler post and (ADVERTISEMENT) (JOIN REIGN OF CHAOS, A GREAT RPG STARTED BY ENAMELITY)
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winterfate
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posted May 21, 2008 03:25 AM |
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Please someone tell me how to paste pictures into the thread, I have a map that I want to use here.
@King_Nikolai: Hmm...I don't think you can paste pictures directly into the thread. You need a picture hosting service like Photobucket (you can make a free account at their website) to host your pictures and then you link to them from here, in the following manner...
Example:
(img)http://www.pichostingsite.com/etc/etc.jpg(/img)
You have to replace the () with [].
I'm probably not making a lot of sense, but I'm sure there's someone out there who can explain it better than me.
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If Im right everybode makes a character and tells his story, right?
Well, there's actually many ways to run an RPG. Some are freeform (like your idea and the Reign of Terror RP that DagothGares made a not-so-subtle reference to in his most recent post  ) and others are more restricted (like my Pokémon RPG and the War of 5/8).
Regardless of how the RP's rules work, the important part is that everyone have fun. If you're not having fun, then what's the point?
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If you supposedly care about someone, then don't push them out of your life. Acting like you're not doing it doesn't exempt you from what I just said. - Winterfate
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 21, 2008 06:19 PM |
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Finally my map is up =D if anyone....anyone?...would like it explained im happy to help...
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DagothGares
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posted May 21, 2008 07:51 PM |
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It gives a clear overview. But are you gonna keep portraying a story around this (fairly big) map by yourself? (I thought this was gonna be a short story)
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 21, 2008 08:14 PM |
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Ehm well for now i will spinn on to it. It will not include the whole world, byt anyone who wants can make their own character, and luckily we can have a great party together I know my ambitions are high, but what the h**l I's my topic, I do as I want ^^
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 22, 2008 06:16 PM |
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The storm had faded, however he hadn't bothered hiding from it in the first place. He was filled with a determination stronger than anything he ever known before, to kill the necromancer that had did this to him. It was clear that the necromancer knew this, there was no other reason for him to write about Nabimu-Heshe and Vradish if he didn't want him to find them.
So far he had only encountered a few mindless zombies, and he had suprisingly easy defeated the lot. He was now armed with a butcher knife, and a rusty iron spear. He had promised himself that just this knife would be his tool to slay the necromancer.
Suddenly he was ripped away from his thoughts, as he across the endless snow steppes, could see the towers of Nabimu-Heshe. An evil grin appeared in his face, and he swung the knife in the air, wondering how it would feel to carve out the guts of Vradish.
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DagothGares
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posted May 22, 2008 06:17 PM |
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Filler post...
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Adrius
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posted May 22, 2008 08:39 PM |
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good writing, although I easily get bored by Necromantic stories, as I feel that the undead are a bit overused.
This was good however, a classic "monster rebels against his creator" story 
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DagothGares
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posted May 22, 2008 08:40 PM |
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Frankenstein... We miss you so...
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Adrius
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posted May 22, 2008 08:52 PM |
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Frankenstein... We miss you so...
Exactly
Man I should start writing again, I have like, 3-4 stories just waiting to be finished. But the problem with me is my inability to make short stories, I only make long ones that I eventually lose interest in...
Writing short is a gift, I envy you and all others with the "power"
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DagothGares
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posted May 22, 2008 08:53 PM |
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It's not that hard... Just be prepared to kill off your main character...
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Adrius
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posted May 22, 2008 09:20 PM |
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Hmm...yeah, that was what I did in my only posted story on this forum. Lots of other's got killed too, there's a lot of killing in my stories
Anyway, here's one of my story concepts, unfinished ofcourse...
(Original idea by Daystar, thanks by the way )
Harus is a boy born into a poor family near the lands of the wizards, one day he discovers that he has a power to manipulate the mind of the living, starting with his pet-rat which he nearly kills in the process, making it dance until it falls unconscious. His family is overjoyed with his powers as it will surely help them out of their poor situation. Harus is sent to the Silver Cities for magical training, with his family's expectations weighing heavily on his shoulders...
This is the kind of story I was planning to make, the only problem being... the kid is like 9 years old. I want him to grow up fast and become a mighty wizard so I can get to the real Necro/Demon magic plots and other stuff that makes a story interesting. I don't feel like throwing that in the face of a 9 year old.
Here comes my obvious writing-short problem, I need a way to make him grow up fast! Suggestions?
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 22, 2008 10:09 PM |
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Nabimu-Heshe was not a large town. It barely deserved to be called a town. Vradish's keep lay on a top of the hill, with only a few tombs and magical guilds spread out avross the area.
Entering the tower was baraly worth any effort at all. However it was mindless, puke-eating drones he was dealing with. He continued along the corridors, trying to seem as if he was on his way to somewhere. The only ones he came in contact with was a few skeletons. He became unsure of it this was going to help him anything in his search. After all, the necromancer may just have used all of this to lura him away.
After a few minutes, he found the stair leading to the top of the tower. The door was open, and inside he saw the apprentice, who was looking down at the undead below. He walked forth slowly, so that the undead mage wouldn't notice him. When stading behind him, Vradish suddenly turned.
-What do you w...
He quickly slashed him with the knife. Vradish fell to the ground, writhing in pain. Before the apprentice had time to react, he impaled the spear in the shoulder of his victim, Vradish was now completely under control.
- You will tell me about the man who made this to me, he said, and became suprised at the sound of his voice. It sounded as if he was fighting for his breath.
- He told me you would come, Vradish replied, and despite of his injuries, an evil smile appeared on his face. He also told me that your efforts are wasted. While we are standing here, my master is already on board for the Ymhir Province in Kathyria.
- You will arrange for transport, or I will grant you that final death you necromancers are so fond of.
- Don't worry, he gave me complete allowance for you to follow him. He even asked for me to tell you to come to the city of Kahjanjij. He has arranged a suprise there.
Even though it all seemed as the work of some maniac, he accapted this Vradish's help. He later boarded a ship whose prime objective was to deliver him to Ymhir. He did not like any of this, but if the necromancer wanted to play, then he would play along. Standing looking at the rage of the sea, the evil grin reapeared, and once again he swung the knife.
- The world is not large enough to flee from eternity, bonepraiser.
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Adrius
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posted May 23, 2008 09:27 PM |
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Bonepraiser...? That's a really cool necromantic synonym you got there, never heard it before
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King_Nikolai
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posted May 24, 2008 10:46 AM |
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Nothing was going his way, it seemed the gods themsefl was trying to stop him.
The ship had come into a storm, and had been thrown at the north coast of Kathyria, a region who supposedly was controlled by the Sehmit, a religious groups of elves. A few of the other undead had made it to shore, about ten zombies, a few skeletons and a necrolith mage. The mage would be the only one to posses intelligence enough to answer, and so he walked forth to him, pulled him up and said;
- How to get to Ymhir from here, mage?
The mage seemed to be in pain, as he continuesly sweared and cursed his own leg. He looked up at him finally and said;
- We will just have to travel west, until we reach the coast. But I doubt we will come any long before the Sehmit finds our tracks.
- I am not scared of elves, those meadow-loving, poetic hippies will not stand in my way. Wih a dark look in his eyes, the mage was convinced that this one was something special. The group started moving west, during the journey the mage often tried to start smaller conversations with him, but wth little luck. Instead he gained interest when he told stories about the different places in the world. It was the only thing that lifted the dark shadow from the undead's eyes.
It was on the third day that they found them. It was a group of about 8 elves, and as soon as they saw the undead they charged. The zombies answered the attack with brutish roars, and rushed forth as well (if you could call it rush). But the thing that scared the elves most was the terrifying thing, looking something like a ghoul and a vampire at the same time. He easily dispatched two of the attackers with the butchers knife. The zombies was closing up and the elves understood they had already lost. To further prove this, a giant green gas cloud caought the remainers, and they all started to shoke and fell down, and the zombies finished the lot. He cleaned his sword in the sand, and then walked up to the mage.
- What was that? he said.
- Toxica major, a perfect way to finish a band of survivors in a battle. By the way, you impres...
- Teach me how to do these things myself, he said and his eyes burned with impatience. The mage understood there was no way to decline, and so they used the days of travel to lesson him in the arts of dark magic. The mage saw great potent in his apprentice, and an even greater fear.
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Adrius
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posted May 24, 2008 10:53 AM |
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- I am not scared of elves, those meadow-loving, poetic hippies will not stand in my way.
Lol, Poetic hippies
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