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theprawito
Tavern Dweller
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posted January 27, 2006 09:39 AM |
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ICTC: The Temple of Light
Facts and Traits:
AKA: Human, Life
Associated Colours: blue and purple
Worship: Arahsy, the God
Core Philosophy: The power of knowledge, tactic, and defences
Country/Kingdom: The Land of God
Capital City: Mayapada, the castle of Arahsy
Key Symbols: Symbol of defences, castle.
Special Enemy: Dark orc
Description:
Human race live in fertile area between the two big rivers. Civilians live as farmer, fisher, or miner. They build the town encircled by very strong fortified wall, named the wall of Mayapada, so that no enemy can reach the town.
Human race curtsey Arahsy, the Deity. Arahsy give them strength, protection, and abundant natural resources. They have wide rice field; gold, gems, and sulphur mining; and a very peaceful live.
History:
Prologue
In very wide grassland, there is a great battle among Human and Orc. Both of them loose so many armies, but with the protection from Arahsy, Human succeeds to defeat the Orc. The Orc army have been defeated. Boroc, the king of Orc, retreat and run to hide in deepness crevasse.
136 YSD:
In that place, Boroc find the Temple of dammed, place the Isys, the king of darkness, captured by king of Mayapada since a thousand year ago. Boroc freeing and joining his body with Isys and become the new creatures with horrible strength, they are very strong and immortal, called the Dark orc.
1376 YSD:
During 1000 year, Boroc build his army awakening the rancorous soul and make very strong, brutal, and cruel. They have only one aim, revenge.
1390 YSD:
Drusthy, Prince Mayapada, stealing scroll of the gate, a holy spell to open the gate of the wall. Archa, the king of Mayapada, angry and dissipate the Drusthy from the empire. Boroc know this matter and succeed to invite the Drusthy to merge into the Dark orc.
1400 YSD:
During thousands of year, human live consecutively, calm, and peaceful, without realizing big strength which wish to destroy them.
1411 YSD:
With the larger and stronger army, Dark orc succeed to besiege the wall of Mayapada. But, they still can not enter to the town because its keep by the holy spell. Drusthy knowing the secret of the gate and succeed to open it.
1412 YSD:
Wall of Mayapada conquered by the Dark orc army, Human depressed and retreat to leave the wall. They back away to defences the Temple of Light, symbol of the Human strength that protected by the Terrac, the serpent of Arahsy, and Guardian Angel. The next battle is to defences “The Temple of Light”.
Creatures:
Level 1:
Magpie
Type: Walker
Description: Magpie is the basic army of Human race, weak and slowly.
Ability: Melee attack
Spell: -
Militia
Type: Walker
Description: Militia faster than Magpie but still weak.
Ability: Melee attack
Spell: -
Level 2:
Crossbowman
Type: Walker
Description: Range attack army, strong if stay inside castle, but weak for melee battle.
Ability: Range attack
Spell: -
Longbowman
Type: Walker
Description: More accurate and faster than crossbowman, but still weak for melee battle.
Ability: Range attack
Spell: -
Level 3:
Pikeman
Type: Walker
Description: Using javelin as weapon, very good defender.
Ability: Melee attack
Spell: -
Marksman
Type: Walker
Description: Provided with strong war clothes, more Taft than Pikeman.
Ability: Melee attack
Spell: -
Level 4:
Chemist
Type: Walker
Description: Shooter with black powder weapon, with 2x2 range attack, very strong both inside and outside the town.
Ability: Range attack
Spell: -
Black chemist
Type: Walker
Description: faster and more powerful than chemist.
Ability: Range attack
Spell: -
Level 5:
Legionare
Type: Walker
Description: Both of Swordsman and archer, slowly but very taught and 50% deflected the enemy spell.
Ability: Melee attack, range attack, spells
Spell: Curse
Elite Legionare
Type: Walker
Description: faster than Legionare.
Ability: Melee attack, range attack, spells
Spell: Curse
Level 6:
Knight
Type: Walker (horseman)
Description: Cavalry with long sword, very strong against range or melee attack army.
Ability: Melee attack
Spell: -
Paladin
Type: Walker (horseman)
Description: Upgraded from knight, provided with the Angel shield so that cannot be attacked by range attack army.
Ability: Melee attack
Spell: -
Level 7:
Terrac
Type: Walker
Description: Terrac is special army, very strong. They trained by Archangel, the guard of Arahsy
Ability: Melee attack, spell
Spell: Lightning bold, curse, heavenly shield, and holy song
Grand Terrac
Type: Flyer
Description: The power of Arahsy, faster and stronger than Terrac.
Ability: Melee attack, spell
Spell: Lightning bold, chain lightning, curse, heavenly shield, and holy song
Special creature:
Guardian angel
Type: non-army
Description: Guardian angel is not an army, but he can increase morality and defences power of all army.
Ability: Spell
Spell: Guardian angels, heavenly shield, bless, and mass bless.
Special building:
Temple of Light : Place for recruit the Guardian angel.
Library of enlighment: Increases the hero’s ability to gain more experience in every battle.
Heroes:
Archa: king of Mayapada
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frakel
Adventuring Hero
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posted February 08, 2006 12:49 AM |
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Ok - looks I´m gonna be the one to start the voting here:
Race: 2 (Almost no description, no flag)
History: 3 (Doesn´t link with H5 timeline or history)
Creatures: 5 (Nice variety of creatures)
Balance: 8 (Nicely balanced creatures)
Originality: 2 (Very, very close to the Haven faction)
Overall: 20 / 50
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MasterSandro
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posted February 08, 2006 04:26 AM |
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3
Yes, 3. Let me explain why:
1st: TOO MUCH like the Haven, you have even 3 creatures in common with haven.
2nd: History, first, it goes WAY beyond the present of H5.
3rd: Creatures, Chemist don't fit Heroes, chemist is a guy who can make a bomb with a good mix, or make acids with oxids, but not someone who can be called dark or something, nor make magical infusions, this is an ALchemist. Pikemans evolve to marksman (marksmanship is thew ability with ranged combat), besides, you say they use javelins, which is a completely diferent weapon from a pike.
4th: Most of the features are VERY vague. Like the Terrac, where is he inspiration of these? Just a name to humans trained by angels? For starts no human can reach the grade of a LVL 7 in my opinion, but that's not the point. Besides, you don't give ANY interpretation of this Arahsy, and why it is worshiped for starts, because in the H5 world there is no other deities than the dragons.
5th: Lots of missinterpretation of features, like the core philosophy, that you leave with a general meaning instead of an actual "motto" to follow.
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kookastar
Honorable
Legendary Hero
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posted February 10, 2006 12:07 PM |
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Race 4 – more description needed
History 3
Creatures 6
Balance 5
Originality 5
23/50
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phoenixzs
Adventuring Hero
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posted February 11, 2006 11:59 AM |
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FriendOfGunnar
Honorable
Legendary Hero
able to speed up time
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posted February 14, 2006 11:31 PM |
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Temple of Light
Race( 2+3 )=5 there’s already a human faction like this
History( 1+4 )=5
Creatures(1 +4 )=5 too much like haven
Balance(2 +2 )=4 units 1,2,3,4,5,6 and 7 too similar
Originality=3
(minus one for no flag)
Total Score= 21
How I graded these:
Race (Originality [1-5]+Compatibility with HOMM5 universe[1-5])
History (How interesting is it to me [1-5] +Compatibility with HOMM5 universe [1-5])
Creatures (Originality [1-5] +Internal Consistency [1-5])
Balance (are the special skills inventive [1-5] + Does it have a variety of flyers, shooters, walkers, spell-casters [1-5]
Originality (all the originality scores added up and divided by two. This means that creativity counts twice. [1-10])
14 to go
This is my artwork that I will be publishing soon. If you see this please don't tell anyone okay?
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Valeriy
Mage of the Land
Naughty, Naughty Valeriy
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posted February 23, 2006 05:59 AM |
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Judge rating: 30 or lower.
This entry feels like it is in draft stage.
Definitely needs more work and more detailed descriptions.
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